EVIDENCE

A few snippets of conversation and interaction has been obtained which may help us name the culprit of the progress crime. These were taken from a carelessly unguarded wiki showing her conspiring with a fellow colleague.

I'm not so sure.

Made by Monica Zhao on 3/30/2013 at 7:56 PM, EST.

I'm not so sure whether I should be altering the entire thing to suit every target member. Or maybe I should just make clear which of the specified target group im actually writing for. What do you think?

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Re: I'm not so sure.

Made by Tracey Li on 3/30/2013 at 7:59 PM, EST.

i think you have generalised the information - to keep the product open to a range of ages. I feel at times it's directed to our age group - 20s - from language - but it's tots up to u? we can always amend the criteria.

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Made by Monica Zhao on 3/30/2013 at 8:18 PM, EST.
Ok, great! I don't think we should be altering the criteria any further to suit our information products as our main focus is to FOLLOW it. So I think I will see what I can do with my product first. Of course, seeing as we already discussed our target and objectives before we even started to write our information products, I think we're on the right track!

BUT wait theres more... recent detectors just sent in further evidence of interaction and team work.

I CHOOSE THIS ONE!!!

Made by Monica Zhao on 3/30/2013 at 7:18 PM, EST.

I choose this one as one of the two that we initially choose!

It's simple and catchy with fun dot points! In my opinion, I find this much more easy to read compared to your article (well of course, it's an article). On introduction I don't think patients, families or friends would want to drive into an article; they would want to read something not as serious to ease them into things like articles. Plus I really like how you started with questions. Made me say it in fun voices! so I this effects and grabs the audience in a good way. GREAT JOB!